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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 1:54 am | |
| - Wolf Hikari wrote:
- Zero Saber Girl
- In My Mind (with annotations) PART ONE:
PARAGRAPH 1
It has been three days since Haru was accidentally thrown to an unknown planet. (How did she get thrown there? What happened when she was in the spaceship that launched her to this unknown planet? What happened when she landed on the planet? Don't start the story in the middle of storyline)
She can breathe it's almost like earth "What is this place?" she is wondering where she is. She doesn't know what to do, she don't know if she can also eat and rest. Nobody was there, but how can she be alive? It was all the questions. Haru decides to travel the place, hoping to meet at least know something that may can help her to live.(This isn't neccessarily needed just make her wonder where she is, need to rewrite this with more detail, You need to express her emotions, what she sees around her, is she at a forest? In the middle of the desert? or is she swiming in the ocean?)
PARAGRAPH 2
A few hours passed, Haru still doesn't find any track or what she needs. She was tired, dropped and drop her body against the boulder beside her. "I am tired.. What I suppose to do? I can't even saw any food... Aww.. I am hungry.." She can't be helped, dying on herself. She then accidentally fell asleep. (Needs more detail, use similes, metaphors, emotive language and descriptive language)
"Hey, are you alright?" said a robotic voice
"Zero, can you stop being like that. She's a girl." said another voice, this time it was a girl (Always start a new line when writing dialogue, so it is clear and easy to read)
Haru open her eyes slowly, she saw yellow robot's head at first then the other girl in red behind the behind it. (More detail in description is required, you have to pretend the reader knows nothing)
"What!? What are you!" Haru surprisingly asked (Very rude, not the kind of greeting a person would give to somebody who wants to help Instead, try something like this)
"Oh Hello, Who are you two?" Haru asked
"Oh, you're up." Said the the girl with red armor
"It's dangerous around Archantus, what are you doing here?" the small yellow robot asked (Fixed)
"Yeah, we just detected some power of chaos was here just then. Maybe they're hiding somewhere." said the red girl
"What? Archantus? Chaos? What are these two talking about?" Haru thought in her mind.(Be the narrator and describe what Haru is feeling, what is she thinking? Don't make her say her thoughts to the reader, it's not really interesting that way, you want to make the reader wonder about her. It kind of adds suspense
"Oh, you seems to be surprised. You must be not from here." The red girl said.
"Just... How are you?" Haru asked. "Sorry, I almost forgot. My name is Crimrose, you can call me Crim, this one is Zero Saber." The red girl said.
"Hi!" the yellow robot said
"We're from the Angel Force that was sent to investigate the power if chaos here." Crim added.
Haru become confused. First, the yellow robot and a girl wearing a ridiculous red armor, then Chaos and Archantus. Now, Angel Force, she become more confuse after thinking of it.
"I am Haru.." She said as she don't know what to respond. Her belly growling without noticed, and she become ashamed. "I see.. you must be hungry." Said Crimrose.
(SKIPPED THE EATING PART)(NEVER EVER DO THIS, THIS MAKES THE STORY INCONSISTENT. Write about what happens when they eat, where do they go? What do they do? All these questions are left unanswered.)
PARAGRAPH 4
After eating, Crim and Zero continue their search for the chaos. Haru following them as she cannot be left behind just like hat. Crimrose is flying to look out at the sky, meanwhile Zero and Haru walking on the ground.
Suddenly, CrimRose was ZOOKAD shot down with an explosive projectile (Never use gameplay terms, use proper English as it makes the story more fulfilling to read)
"Wah!" And she fell to the ground.
"They're here!" Zero said.
"Roger.." Crimrose replied
and get's themselves armed. They hastefully arm themselves as they prepare for a battle that is just right ahead of them (Compare this sentence I just added to the text I crossed out)
An Artillery tries to sneak attack Haru from the back. Haru saw it coming almost hit her but saved by Zero. (Not detailed enough)
A large bulky and nearly monstrous looking gigantic robot storms behind Haru, it swings it's massive axe at her. Haru stared at the monstrous robot, her mind went blank, she was helpless. In a split second, Zero desperately rushed and grabbed hold of Haru's lithe body. He managed to save her, from impending death. Zero glared into the monster's eyes, and drew his razor sharp sword. The monster roared, and fired him, but it was already too late. With one swift move, Zero has sliced the monster in half.(This is what I'm talking about, more detail means more suspense, more suspense means a more interesting story)
I've given you some pointers, I'm not trying to be harsh on you but your story has a lot of holes. You need to fill those holes. (You need to add in more detail) |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:13 am | |
| - LXE wrote:
- necrio wrote:
- LXE wrote:
- Lulwut? Setsuna F. Seiei, ORE WA GANDAMU!!!
Should've been Haro Setsuna. +1
That won't fit, people will think of Setsuna F. Seiei! Setsuna name have something to do with sabers and swords. So I pick Haru Setsuna or Setsuna Haru. real name os setsuna f. seiei is not setsuna. setsuna f. seiei is only exist in Exia or any 00Raiser or 00Quanta gundam.! Is there any other problem?  @before this post What do you expect? O_O | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:16 am | |
| wolf, shouldn't you be writing one for Hatigarm? | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:19 am | |
| - necrio wrote:
- wolf, shouldn't you be writing one for Hatigarm?
I was still thinking on that! Why you speak it out? D: | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:25 am | |
| - Wolf Hikari wrote:
- necrio wrote:
- wolf, shouldn't you be writing one for Hatigarm?
I was still thinking on that! Why you speak it out? D: Because you are a furry a guy who likes wolves. I am great at analyzing stuff  | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:30 am | |
| - Wolf Hikari wrote:
- necrio wrote:
- Wolf Hikari wrote:
I was still thinking on that! Why you speak it out? D: Because you are a furry a guy who likes wolves.
I am great at analyzing stuff
HELP ME! PSYCHIC IS HERE! DX now face the manliness of my psycho formula | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Tue Mar 15, 2011 1:45 pm | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Wed Mar 16, 2011 4:12 am | |
| Story became way too long, so i'll post it here.
Name: Marill March
Robot: Marill March
She used to live with her parents, who were two brilliant scientists. Their knowledge was so great, that Marill became an android at a very youn age. When they repeatedly refused to help Chaos in creating next-gen robots, things went very bad when Gigandroff decided to punish them. He hired some mercenary robots, and ordered them to launch an assault on Marill's village. Marill's house was attacked first. While her parents fought desperately to fend of the mercenaries, Marill was hidding in the underground bunker that her parents had build. When the mercenaries were distracting Marill's parents, robots of the Chaos empire stole all their technology and knowledge about robots. Sadly, the laboratory was destroyed in the process. Trapped in the bunker, Marill was forced to hear the screams of her beloved ones as the mercenaries burned down everything. The only thing that she had left from her parents was a necklace of a heart with wings.
After being trapped for two days, Marill desperately did what her father told her: "when something has happened to us, please put your necklace in the hands of the Cupid statue, in the middle of the bunker. It isn't just for show" . When she did that, a stairway that led dowstairs took form. There, was a second laboratory. It was even bigger than the old one. A small robot that looked like a butterfly showed her a way out, but the sight was shocking. The village she once loved was now nothing more than a ruin. Feeling that staying here would hurt too much, she dicided to follow her dream of becomming a musician, accompanied by the butterfly.
But the life of a musician wasn't easy. Because she didn't earn much, she had to take some jobs. Always doing strange things and begging in order to get some money, that was the price she had to pay for realising her dream. However, as years passed, she longed more and more for a place she could call "home". She decided that it was time to go back.
Being back felt painfull, as old scars started to hurt again. In the laboratory, as she was looking for things her parents might have left behind, she stumbled upon a robot called Zero Saber. Zero Saber claimed to be a member of AngelForce, an organisation that fights against the Chaos empire. Even tough she did'nt trust him, she still asked why he came here. Then, he claimed the butterfly robot called him. Without giving her the time to object, he told the truth about her parents. He also told that the butterfly robot was one of their creations. He had the mission of watching over Marill, and notifying AngelForce when she was ready. When Zero Saber told her that her parents' last will was that she'd join their organisation she was just speechless.
After giving it a lot of thought, she made the vow of joining AngelForce. The butterfly robot opened a new door in the room, and asked Marill and Zero Saber to follow him. There, they found themselves in an operation room, filled with parts. The butterfly robot explained that she could recreate her body, so that she could fight. April accepted without hesitation, and the operation was a succes. The butterfly robot explained her the functions of her new body, and showed her a prototype weapon (the Varius).
Two weeks after the operation, Marill managed to completely master the built in weapons of her body. She still had some problems with her prototype weapon, so she temporarily became a bounty hunter; hunting on wanted robots. A year later, after having gained more skills, she joined Angel Force.
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Thu Mar 17, 2011 1:11 am | |
| - Valkyrie wrote:
- Nisa wrote:
- TL;DR
 Too Long Didn't Read. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 1:58 pm | |
| So I heard you like manly stories - Spoiler:
I fought at the biggest attack of Chaos to the Cosmic Ark, It was the first time I went to the war so I was really nervous about doing this... but a lot of people told me that I was able to do this due to my big body and my powerful arms, I was pretty confident on them, but maybe this was pretty much...
And so it began, Chaos entered, and all his army deployed around the Central Area and around the Unions Areas, We we're waiting for the orders of commander Hound Dog. When the first chaos squadron appeared, Hound Dog shouted:
''NOW!''. As the commander shouted, a group of Air's deployed from the sides, and started to attack the squadron, we set that trap to confuse them, and then, the Lnd's units deployed, to embrace them into combat.
As I started fighting, I could feel the power flowing around my arms, I destroyed almost 100 chaos units, and I could still going, and then the second and third squadron appeared, we needed to rush against them, since our trap was used already, luckily, we had another Ace under our sleeve, Hound Dog shouted: ''Snipers, bust them now!'' and a rain of bullets comming from Rifles, Beam Rifles and Railguns fallen into thousands of chaos units, and so again, the Lnd group, leader by commander Hound Dog defeated them.
When we tought we had all under control, suddenly, a rifle bullet went through Hound Dog's core, as we all saw that horrific image, the final squadron appeared, but we now entered in panic, due to our commander beeing injured, but most importantly... K-Ogre, the Chaos was with them.
The confusion and panic was in our circuits, but we were not let that stop us, as we started the final fight.
Many lifes were lost during that battle, Chaos was defeating us, the Air group was slaughtered by the now full of blood and oil sword of K-Ogre. The Snipers group was ambushed by a group of Airs that had Stealth Systems activated. I tought it was the end, but I couldn't stop fighting, the only thing I could do was fight. Fight. FIGHT.
And then, before I knew it, I was alone, facing K-Ogre, and the Chaos Army, I had to do something, If I was ment to die there, I wasn't gonna let Chaos win, my core started to realease more energy than the normal, my Booster started to use energy 10 more times than the usual, and then, I rushed at high speed, throwing away every single soldier of chaos that was infront of me, I was aiming to K-Ogre, he was waiting for me, as he rised his arm, I raised mine, and then, I punched him into his Body, but sadly, he managed to rip my arm off, I kept attacking him with my other arm, until I managed to leave a several injurie into his chest.
He was going to give me the final blow, my core started raising more energy again, and so, I gave him the last blow, I went through his body. He suddenly kneeled in pain, and I, fainted into the ground, due to have used all my energy.
K-Ogre ordered the retreat. My body was damaged, one of my arms was destroyed, and I couldn't move at all. I returned to Cosmic Ark many years laters, they told that Chaos taked my body and shattered into pieces, leaving them around Arcantus, because they didn't want Cosmic Ark to rebuild me, luckily, a small group of exploration found my parts, and the researchers restored me, my motherboard and my memory were restored too.
And now, I bow to protect Cosmic Ark, using my bare two fists...
inb4 comments about my terrible english skills | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 2:25 pm | |
| - RenExceed wrote:
- So I heard you like manly stories
- Spoiler:
I fought at the biggest attack of Chaos to the Cosmic Ark, It was the first time I went to the war so I was really nervous about doing this... but a lot of people told me that I was able to do this due to my big body and my powerful arms, I was pretty confident on them, but maybe this was pretty much...
And so it began, Chaos entered, and all his army deployed around the Central Area and around the Unions Areas, We we're waiting for the orders of commander Hound Dog. When the first chaos squadron appeared, Hound Dog shouted:
''NOW!''. As the commander shouted, a group of Air's deployed from the sides, and started to attack the squadron, we set that trap to confuse them, and then, the Lnd's units deployed, to embrace them into combat.
As I started fighting, I could feel the power flowing around my arms, I destroyed almost 100 chaos units, and I could still going, and then the second and third squadron appeared, we needed to rush against them, since our trap was used already, luckily, we had another Ace under our sleeve, Hound Dog shouted: ''Snipers, bust them now!'' and a rain of bullets comming from Rifles, Beam Rifles and Railguns fallen into thousands of chaos units, and so again, the Lnd group, leader by commander Hound Dog defeated them.
When we tought we had all under control, suddenly, a rifle bullet went through Hound Dog's core, as we all saw that horrific image, the final squadron appeared, but we now entered in panic, due to our commander beeing injured, but most importantly... K-Ogre, the Chaos was with them.
The confusion and panic was in our circuits, but we were not let that stop us, as we started the final fight.
Many lifes were lost during that battle, Chaos was defeating us, the Air group was slaughtered by the now full of blood and oil sword of K-Ogre. The Snipers group was ambushed by a group of Airs that had Stealth Systems activated. I tought it was the end, but I couldn't stop fighting, the only thing I could do was fight. Fight. FIGHT.
And then, before I knew it, I was alone, facing K-Ogre, and the Chaos Army, I had to do something, If I was ment to die there, I wasn't gonna let Chaos win, my core started to realease more energy than the normal, my Booster started to use energy 10 more times than the usual, and then, I rushed at high speed, throwing away every single soldier of chaos that was infront of me, I was aiming to K-Ogre, he was waiting for me, as he rised his arm, I raised mine, and then, I punched him into his Body, but sadly, he managed to rip my arm off, I kept attacking him with my other arm, until I managed to leave a several injurie into his chest.
He was going to give me the final blow, my core started raising more energy again, and so, I gave him the last blow, I went through his body. He suddenly kneeled in pain, and I, fainted into the ground, due to have used all my energy.
K-Ogre ordered the retreat. My body was damaged, one of my arms was destroyed, and I couldn't move at all. I returned to Cosmic Ark many years laters, they told that Chaos taked my body and shattered into pieces, leaving them around Arcantus, because they didn't want Cosmic Ark to rebuild me, luckily, a small group of exploration found my parts, and the researchers restored me, my motherboard and my memory were restored too.
And now, I bow to protect Cosmic Ark, using my bare two fists...
inb4 comments about my terrible english skills A little bit lacking on the epicness department but otherwise OK I think. Squealer, I suppose? | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 2:40 pm | |
| - necrio wrote:
- RenExceed wrote:
- So I heard you like manly stories
- Spoiler:
I fought at the biggest attack of Chaos to the Cosmic Ark, It was the first time I went to the war so I was really nervous about doing this... but a lot of people told me that I was able to do this due to my big body and my powerful arms, I was pretty confident on them, but maybe this was pretty much...
And so it began, Chaos entered, and all his army deployed around the Central Area and around the Unions Areas, We we're waiting for the orders of commander Hound Dog. When the first chaos squadron appeared, Hound Dog shouted:
''NOW!''. As the commander shouted, a group of Air's deployed from the sides, and started to attack the squadron, we set that trap to confuse them, and then, the Lnd's units deployed, to embrace them into combat.
As I started fighting, I could feel the power flowing around my arms, I destroyed almost 100 chaos units, and I could still going, and then the second and third squadron appeared, we needed to rush against them, since our trap was used already, luckily, we had another Ace under our sleeve, Hound Dog shouted: ''Snipers, bust them now!'' and a rain of bullets comming from Rifles, Beam Rifles and Railguns fallen into thousands of chaos units, and so again, the Lnd group, leader by commander Hound Dog defeated them.
When we tought we had all under control, suddenly, a rifle bullet went through Hound Dog's core, as we all saw that horrific image, the final squadron appeared, but we now entered in panic, due to our commander beeing injured, but most importantly... K-Ogre, the Chaos was with them.
The confusion and panic was in our circuits, but we were not let that stop us, as we started the final fight.
Many lifes were lost during that battle, Chaos was defeating us, the Air group was slaughtered by the now full of blood and oil sword of K-Ogre. The Snipers group was ambushed by a group of Airs that had Stealth Systems activated. I tought it was the end, but I couldn't stop fighting, the only thing I could do was fight. Fight. FIGHT.
And then, before I knew it, I was alone, facing K-Ogre, and the Chaos Army, I had to do something, If I was ment to die there, I wasn't gonna let Chaos win, my core started to realease more energy than the normal, my Booster started to use energy 10 more times than the usual, and then, I rushed at high speed, throwing away every single soldier of chaos that was infront of me, I was aiming to K-Ogre, he was waiting for me, as he rised his arm, I raised mine, and then, I punched him into his Body, but sadly, he managed to rip my arm off, I kept attacking him with my other arm, until I managed to leave a several injurie into his chest.
He was going to give me the final blow, my core started raising more energy again, and so, I gave him the last blow, I went through his body. He suddenly kneeled in pain, and I, fainted into the ground, due to have used all my energy.
K-Ogre ordered the retreat. My body was damaged, one of my arms was destroyed, and I couldn't move at all. I returned to Cosmic Ark many years laters, they told that Chaos taked my body and shattered into pieces, leaving them around Arcantus, because they didn't want Cosmic Ark to rebuild me, luckily, a small group of exploration found my parts, and the researchers restored me, my motherboard and my memory were restored too.
And now, I bow to protect Cosmic Ark, using my bare two fists...
inb4 comments about my terrible english skills A little bit lacking on the epicness department but otherwise OK I think.
Squealer, I suppose? Im so ovbious Did that on 15 minutes though, without thinking any good argument | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 2:43 pm | |
| - RenExceed wrote:
- necrio wrote:
- RenExceed wrote:
- So I heard you like manly stories
- Spoiler:
I fought at the biggest attack of Chaos to the Cosmic Ark, It was the first time I went to the war so I was really nervous about doing this... but a lot of people told me that I was able to do this due to my big body and my powerful arms, I was pretty confident on them, but maybe this was pretty much...
And so it began, Chaos entered, and all his army deployed around the Central Area and around the Unions Areas, We we're waiting for the orders of commander Hound Dog. When the first chaos squadron appeared, Hound Dog shouted:
''NOW!''. As the commander shouted, a group of Air's deployed from the sides, and started to attack the squadron, we set that trap to confuse them, and then, the Lnd's units deployed, to embrace them into combat.
As I started fighting, I could feel the power flowing around my arms, I destroyed almost 100 chaos units, and I could still going, and then the second and third squadron appeared, we needed to rush against them, since our trap was used already, luckily, we had another Ace under our sleeve, Hound Dog shouted: ''Snipers, bust them now!'' and a rain of bullets comming from Rifles, Beam Rifles and Railguns fallen into thousands of chaos units, and so again, the Lnd group, leader by commander Hound Dog defeated them.
When we tought we had all under control, suddenly, a rifle bullet went through Hound Dog's core, as we all saw that horrific image, the final squadron appeared, but we now entered in panic, due to our commander beeing injured, but most importantly... K-Ogre, the Chaos was with them.
The confusion and panic was in our circuits, but we were not let that stop us, as we started the final fight.
Many lifes were lost during that battle, Chaos was defeating us, the Air group was slaughtered by the now full of blood and oil sword of K-Ogre. The Snipers group was ambushed by a group of Airs that had Stealth Systems activated. I tought it was the end, but I couldn't stop fighting, the only thing I could do was fight. Fight. FIGHT.
And then, before I knew it, I was alone, facing K-Ogre, and the Chaos Army, I had to do something, If I was ment to die there, I wasn't gonna let Chaos win, my core started to realease more energy than the normal, my Booster started to use energy 10 more times than the usual, and then, I rushed at high speed, throwing away every single soldier of chaos that was infront of me, I was aiming to K-Ogre, he was waiting for me, as he rised his arm, I raised mine, and then, I punched him into his Body, but sadly, he managed to rip my arm off, I kept attacking him with my other arm, until I managed to leave a several injurie into his chest.
He was going to give me the final blow, my core started raising more energy again, and so, I gave him the last blow, I went through his body. He suddenly kneeled in pain, and I, fainted into the ground, due to have used all my energy.
K-Ogre ordered the retreat. My body was damaged, one of my arms was destroyed, and I couldn't move at all. I returned to Cosmic Ark many years laters, they told that Chaos taked my body and shattered into pieces, leaving them around Arcantus, because they didn't want Cosmic Ark to rebuild me, luckily, a small group of exploration found my parts, and the researchers restored me, my motherboard and my memory were restored too.
And now, I bow to protect Cosmic Ark, using my bare two fists...
inb4 comments about my terrible english skills A little bit lacking on the epicness department but otherwise OK I think.
Squealer, I suppose?
Im so ovbious
Did that on 15 minutes though, without thinking any good argument meh, I never think when I write. Such as my cannonballer backstory at page 3 or something, I made it up as I go XD. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 2:48 pm | |
| - necrio wrote:
- RenExceed wrote:
- necrio wrote:
A little bit lacking on the epicness department but otherwise OK I think.
Squealer, I suppose?
Im so ovbious
Did that on 15 minutes though, without thinking any good argument meh, I never think when I write.
Such as my cannonballer backstory at page 3 or something, I made it up as I go XD. But that was pretty manly though D: I guess I dont have that much MANLINESS on my blood | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sat Mar 26, 2011 10:45 pm | |
| - RenExceed wrote:
- necrio wrote:
- RenExceed wrote:
Im so ovbious
Did that on 15 minutes though, without thinking any good argument meh, I never think when I write.
Such as my cannonballer backstory at page 3 or something, I made it up as I go XD.
But that was pretty manly though D:
I guess I dont have that much MANLINESS on my blood Use Byne, be manly. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Story Time Thread - Release your imagination Sun Mar 27, 2011 12:07 am | |
| - necrio wrote:
- RenExceed wrote:
- necrio wrote:
meh, I never think when I write.
Such as my cannonballer backstory at page 3 or something, I made it up as I go XD.
But that was pretty manly though D:
I guess I dont have that much MANLINESS on my blood Use Byne, be manly. Or cannonballer for even more manliness | |
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